what's the concept? that shit swayed from place to place like light wood!
You should have focused on one concept, cause i still don't know whats the point of this
Don't mean to be hard on you though, the lyrics were real, the flow was on point
but at the end of this read, im left, thinking what was this all about? what's the message?
when your getting on a moral tip kinda verse, you need to leave the reader with a MORAL- a strong one at that....so try writting this over with an aim, and you'll see how this could turn out to be a GREAT piece...deUce..real talk baby. keep droppin

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