Chains are thinning; but I'm still cowering in a damp corner..
Trying to see past the eye if the needle, & visibly capture..
^^^great beginning lines here, showed great amount of emotion, didnt really jumo straight into the poem, but you made this very deep. and sounded nice.

I want the hours to die, shrivel like prunes & curl up in a ball..
Like I did, just, like I did. Put them in the same position as I have..
^^^DEEP. i like how you said you want the hours to die. very deep emotion.

Windpipe closing in, breathing showing worthy of a obstacle
^^^for some reason this line caught my eye. but in this one line, this has a huge message behind it.

As fresh air, I'm no longer prey to a human, or a demon assuming the role..
Of a human, but as this chapter closes, I'm prey to the bitch known as..
^^^o man, nice nice nice. very nice. i love this ending. very deep. i like this how you put this in first person and said the MOTHER NATURE line to go along with the last couplet. very ice.