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Old 06-21-05, 07:37 PM   #3
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Vivid colours, reviving loud vibrant notions as the butterfly settles..
Beauty panning out, in seperate wings clashing contending petals..
^^^a very deep passionate way to start off a poem, i can tell from these one couplet that the poem is going to be deep.

White waves linger, elegancy is a virtue to this beast of wonder..
It takes air elevates above the status of breathtaking & plunders..
^^^very good rhyme scheme, very good intracate emotion. o man these ryhmes are just superb.

Life grinds to a halt; pond life, tree canopies catch the wind & watch..
Angelic spirit forms in the miniscule gales, into a cream of God's crop..
^^^i like how this is a little battle, you made the reader think. this is very good.

It seems as if it's personified into Gabriels figure, a pure glow clings..
To this butterflys body, mind morphs to a prophet as it's soul sings..
^^^very deep, im at a loss of words.

Preaching with the basics, nature. Spreading lust & love among life..
Releasing the within, of me. Gabriel in the sillhouette of the butterfly..
Shakes off an icey pretence, & puts forward the knife..
^^^deep, im running out of things to say becuase this is so so so so so meaningful and deep. keep up the good work.
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