o man o man o man, this is some fucked up shit, MODS MAKE A STORY FORUM OR SUMTIN cuz your the second guy ive seen write a letter type poem. but anyway, this was not eyecatching. but anyway, rhyme scheme needs alot of work, should have placed this in bars. so that the reader may understand the real deepness of this. but i like the form of wordplay in some places. to me this sounded like an intro to a part of a song bcuz of the way it was writtin. but even though i could still pin point where you were rhyming and stuff, so this was just a mediocre piece.