well, it's definately a unique topic, i have 2 give you that. lol not many people would rap about their morning bathroom routine. clever, i always have appreciation for innovative emcees. As far as the verse goes... the imagery was good, multis were everywhere, you stayed on topic pretty well, vocab was decent, and the structure was straight, too. But you lost me at some times that I had to re-read it because the lines were a bit stretched, for example, "On path love Listerine, fast gargles from glass bottles seem" i don't know if it was just me or if it was confusing. The wording was very flipped and twisted, too twisted that it didn't make sense, you know? The wordplay and metaphors were there, but they weren't very good. The multis, as i said before, were there, but i think that you started to build your verse around them rather than say what you want to say and incorporate them into your verse. Overall, i thought it was okay, but you could definately elevate. I tend to rate lower than most people, but i would rate this a 6/10.

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Repping The Establishment

Rhymes
Story of a Statistic
My Dream

audio
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Art
Surreal Bird Sketch