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New to RV
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Very well written, multis were good and used nicely, i really liked how you placed your thoughts/lines like "promised a ride, to tha skys, but steadily put me beneath tha dirt
always nsync with burns, the way she mixed gasoline wit words" also i liked how you used words as fire, it gave it a big impact (well, that's how i interpreted 'words' as). Everything else was straight, too (metas, vocab, etc.) wordplay could use a tid bit elevation and the complexity of the verse could be more. Other than that, i can't think of anything else you could've done. I would rate it an 8.5/10
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