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New to RV
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intermental:
your lines were uneven (you shouldn't need '...'s to make the bars even, you switched subjects pretty often, a few of the lines were redundant and irrelevant like "Inicdentaly, "inter" enter peoples mind "mentally", makin wack emcees "history" < first, if something enters your mind, it's already mental and second, beating emcees doesn't have anything to do w/ ppl thinking about you. There wasn't much wordplay and the vocab could be improved, too. On the positive, i liked the 'rap capital' line. I would rate it overall a 3/10.
messenger:
nice sentance structure, i like how you phrased things, it was easy to read, multis were good and abundant, try to avoid using the same word in the same sentance "ignorance is bliss, if you consider it I will dismiss, that is true bliss" i think that's the only time, though. It was a little boring 2 read and wordplay and metas weren't that great. Vocab and complexity can use upping, too. Overall, I would rate it a 4/10
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