Fix your structure a bit gurl because many people will not read this just because they're so stupid to care about structure haha

I like this piece, the emotion is clearly worded, straight written from the heart which I am definitely feeling of course. Had some nice imagery for instance:

"All I see now is a blurry day, filled with gray skies and violet rain."

Like how the story develops and how you display your feelings, keep it up gurl

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