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New to RV
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IP:
I love you both, yet hate you, too because you made me tear up in fron of jerome (damn you) lol but I definately liked this drop especially DQ's verse, it was very genuine, either that, or she's just a really good story teller. As far as the actual verses go...
Intermental: flow was okay, it was a tid bit choppy at times (not the words, the ideas), you could've gone more complex and more out of the box with your emotion/wordplay, metas were lacking, too. Multis were good, and your vocab was on point. It just didn't strike me that hard, it needed that extra something. It wasn't bad, though. Overall, I would give it a 6/10.
Drama Queen: Imagery was very good, i could feel the people staring at me just by reading it (idk if i'm a little byist because i'm also in an interracial relationship, but i think the imagery was very good) emotion was strong, the entire verses was put together perfectly, i loved how you used the 'true colors collide' line. However, the wordplay was lacking and it was good, but there's always improvement on complexity w/ the rhyme scheme and metas. Overall, I would rate it an 8/10. hope i helped.
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