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Old 06-24-05, 06:03 PM   #13
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From: Mackamento
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Originally Posted by Drama Queen
Uhm it's an aight piece but guys be pussyriding like whoa haha...

Imagery was good, describing everything in a uhm clear way I guess, you said it straight forward. Emotion was best in the last lines where you say to be careful as if you were a china doll. It was a decent piece but you might try to keep more mysterious vibe and reword some shit so it gets a more poetic vibe.


...Pussy rides me.


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