Nice battle right here, let me break it down

Pen N' Paper: you used a more predictable approach of the topic but I liked the piece nonetheless. Had some nice imagery and metaphors in it, vocab was good and flow was okay. Emotion was best aspect of the piece, story developed quite good but I feel you could've gone slightly more into detail. Other than that it was a solid topical!

OneStepBeyond: I absolutely love your approach of the topic, how you looked at it as in losing hope. The way you built up the story was excellent, kept suspense in it which made the reader want to continue. Vocab was on point, flow was good and the emotion was amazing as well as the imagery. Excellent piece!

In the end, my vote goes to OneStepBeyond for his creativity and how he worked it out, no hate to Pen N' Paper though, you wrote a solid piece as well!

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