1ndeph: beautiful piece in my opinion, I love how you approached the topic that was given. Emotion was without a doubt the most powerful aspect of your piece, it was so raw and pure. Imagery was there too of course, it was like watching a movie in different scenes. Story developed nicely, kept the reader focussed. Flow was good, vocab was on point and structure was nice with the division into different parts.

Phorge: your piece had a real poetic vibe over it actually, lines were stretched so the flow wasn't really there. The vocab was excellent, story developed nicely even though your structure sometimes made it hard to follow. Imagery was nice but the emotion was strongest of course, I love your approach of the topic and why the person broke the routine. A nice piece!

My vote goes to 1ndeph because I got more a topical feeling of his, other than that both pieces were at a very high level. Props!

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