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Old 06-27-05, 03:41 PM   #36
K-Trini
Banned: Cheating
 
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From: N.Y./born in Trinidad
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Voted For: Da UFC

Battling me? Kid everywhere u go, coast to coast u suck
Cause I easily can eat everything RB decides to post up (RB=Arby's)
^^Nice
Oh what? Of course it's true, ur singin while i smash kids
R&B? Yeah.. only cause this guy is a Bliged to wackness*
^^^Nice wordplay
Now im laughin.. You just aint on my level, but still dude
How sad is it IV gets put in ears.. and it fucking kills you**
^^Nice wordplay &personal
I fill you with venom.. kid for real, all you post up is shit
And I only mention RIP.. cause I just destroyed ur spit
^^nah...ur worst bar

All ur lines were good except fot that last one.U had nice wordplay and personals in it.Verse was structered good.Flow was good.Just that last bar fucked it up.But still a good verse.

My lines leavening you Untimely fucking Critical//
I hit niggas hard like am bucking that means am subliminal//
^^self glorified....not a punch
Ripping ideals sick with hits that drop so hot on the ufc //
Open da flesh with a switch blade and take his dignity//
^^^self glorifyied....not a punch
Cracking craniums critically and that am congressional condemned with//
And especially elude throw condemns to preg--nate your pregnant bitch//
^^^whack
What you thought them kids where your sperm//
Please niggas bitchs don’t ever even get fillings off worms//
^^OK....ur best line

Okay...first thing I gotta say is to stop self glorifying.Focus on dissing.And put personals.Ur shit had no effect.No wordplay(except that pitiful attempt to rip his name),weak metas.And try to structure ur verse better.Only good bar was the last one.

Vote-Da UfC(vote in link below or I'll have this vote removed)
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=196901
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