Well....I thought this poem was good I haven't seen any of your other stuff so this surprised me...I think your imagery throughout was very good you have a lot of descriptive details...then your emotion is also good in this piece along with the storyline that you had....Overall i believe this is a very good piece keep it up
and please.....RTF on my poem thanks...
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