Voted For: SCI CON

this nigga says hes large.... allover tha street when he rolls,
yeah fat as hell..... got guys stickin 2 ur ass like cholesterol,
^^This dun rhyme and played concept....
im tha king of cheap shots leavin ya body full of holes,
fucka cheap shot son im sellin bullets from coles,
^^^nah...suked
ur lost in tha clouds but dawg ive come 2 kill a dream,
im freddy crueger bitch open up ur mind like a gillotine,
^^^whack.......not a punch
lets say 4 evry bad line weve eva had they took a dollar and went to burn it,
then im livin it up son and ur a fuckin river hermit,
^^^whack.....not a punch

Problem with your verse was that you kept talking about yourself instead of the oppenent.Focus more on dissing.Add wordplay and metas too.And ur 1st bar....the closest one to a punch....didn't rhyme.

your soppused~to~be as Dope~as~me`bitch jut keep focused~G
This whole bar is a multie` bitch Go~die` since youre opposing~me
^^^not a punch
arch~angel` I’ll leave your heart~strangled` so lets compare~levels
Your probably an alias` known as the gayest~kid call me a Dare~devel
^^not a punch
someone told~me` you aint fresh..just Moldy` like un-used~dairy
this newbs~scary reminds me of an overweight MM, like Drew~Cary
^^^OK.....best line in the verse.

Same thing with you.U had one bar that was a punch and 2 that wasn't.Only thing different between you and the other guy was that ur one punch had flow in it.So you got it,.

Weak battle

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