Voted For: Pen N' Paper
ok lets see:
PP:
It’s the opener and this battle is already dominated
U can claim u are RAW but ull never get nominated
ehh........ not a punch really.. 2/10
A fake gangsta tryin to think he knos bout narcotics and uzi’s
Stop telling lies cuz everyone knos u aint got it so don’t push me
same......... 2/10
To the limit cuz it aint a gimmick I bring the WAR to RAW
Ur a blemish so u imperfect man so ur just a short flaw
eh....... 3/10
My rhymes will alter ur arrangement screwin ur scheme
Have u wonderin “OREO” while it blackens like cookies n crème
not bad........ 5/10
Have u wonderin in the “ocean” and when my punches hit u wont “sea”(see)
Cuz really u are “raw” ur rhymes stink like “raw fish” so think it "narc-sushi"
nice try at wordplay......... 6/10
overall, your verse was pretty weak, and you picked it up a lil in the end. But you need to work in MORE wordplay and wit into your verse, nah mean? Help you out much more. Flow was pretty coo tho. Overall not bad, keep elevating yo. 18/50 (36%)[b/]
Ok, now to Narc:
Narc dont get "cold-feet" cause hes a an "O-G" drinking a "40"
While this bitch only "holds-heat" when hes holding a "coffee"
[b] not bad, good use of wordplay.... but kinda played 4/10
Your rapping just "bores me" so im gonna rip this bastard faster than a "leopard"
The only disaster your causing is when u start showing the voters ur batteling "record"
nah,......... 3/10
Keep relying on miracles cause in this battle "you wont last"
If i "chopped of both ya legs" u probably still think u could "kick my ass"
nah, played............... 2/10
I aint new to the rap game so when i win this battle it wont be "begginers luck"
To me its strange that you a living legend but when it comes to rapping dog u "really suck"
no......... too basic.......... 2/10
Are you outta your "mind' or are you just a fucking bitch ass "hood rat"
We might as well "combine" our verses together cuz they both makin you "look bad"
not that bad........... 4/10
Overall, you should add more wordplay and wit to your verses as well. Helps it be a much stronger verse. Also stop wit the " " unless it has a reason to be put in there. but good try tho. keep elevating. 15/50 (30%)
weak battle, but Pen came a lil harde.r. V/ pen
and RTF on this battle or vote WILL be removed. trust me:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=197037