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Old 07-02-05, 07:05 AM   #60
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Voted For: K-Trini

Pen 'N' Paper verse

K-Trini u lacked skill, Livin Legendz didn’t want u cuz of ur stupidity
I always knew ya were an idiot, but rite now ur showin me ur simplicity
^ Punch = meh...diss is there coulda been worded better though

U rappin is like “Mic-heal Jordan” makin errors being a baseball player
The way u win battles is by swaying and realize in fact that ur a failure
^ -_- not feelin this the diss is there but again no punch

Man u “corny” I eat u up like “corn flakes” wit milk like you for breakfast
Even “lunch” or “dinner” man ill be “serving” ur wack ass so u can take this
^ don't rhyme but punch is there but could be worded better

K-Trini man ur a mini bitch wit a gurl name ur punches are not gon be hittin
Ur other verses ive seen “stink like shit” whats the difference ur verse is shittin
^ meh...not feelin again

So K just face it u gay and theres no way for u to win this battle no prospect
Even in GFX, Topical, Audio and this in Text ill murk u cuz u just a speck…
^ weak closer no punch

Overall
You got the right idea wit flow and layout but it's the punches/personals all the important parts about text that you missin...use punches/personals there was none in this verse it was just filler disses were there but they were backed up by nothing

K-Trini Verse

Pen&Paper So obssesed on stayin behind ,you'd ~write-it-late~
And you don't like the pen's function.....you just ~like-it's-shape~
^ lol good opener nice rhyme

It's like I'm amputating on a nuclues,cause I'm~stoppin-his-growth~
And this bitch dun wanna rap,he wanna ram my~cockin-his-throat~
^ punch played but there 1st line self-G but nice rhyme again

You would neva get close to stars like a review on a bad movie
Pen can follow ethics made by kin,but ya verse still won't move me
^ self-g blah

Closest you get to stackin joints,is when you~pack-a-blunt~
Only time you loaded is when ya pumped ~back-and-front~
^ ok closer nice rhyme

Overall
Easy win...punches were there hit reasonably hard...flow was good you had everything Pen&Paper didn't good verse.

V/K-Trini...this is an RTF vote...no deadline set
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