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Old 07-02-05, 11:44 AM   #11
Crazy Hades
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Pretty good. I don't like your style...you should really make bars instead of inner rhyme in your lines...but whatever. Pretty good, I guess. Your vocabulary could be better, and syllable count along with line length. More multis and a second rhyming line would've added to it, I think. 7/10
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