{Propain}: nice concept, vocab was on point, flow was aight. Imagery was good just like the emotion which was raw, had a very straight forward approach, picturing situation vivid and clearly. I was feeling the third one the most, the lines just were so smooth there.

Immense: original approach of the topic and I love how you worked it out, you are speaking mad truth there. It's not your typical topical piece but I absolutely loved reading it, it read so smoothly because everyone on here can relate to this in some way. Vocab was nice, flow was good, can't really comment on imagery or emotion.

Vote goes to Immense because I just felt his a bit more...

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