interesting topic, both had a different sense of direction...which is good

tweety, i liked your verse, thought you would taken this easily, but alot of your lines seemed out of place, fillers if you will, and you can't use fillers in topicals, ruins the whole effect of your point being made.....some of your context just didn't fit at all, like relating to advil medicine, or the gay porn thing....lines like that just ruined your piece, in a sense, because they seemed highly out of place, like they were just there to rhyme with the next line....and if you have to start doing that, then shorten your piece down....word, solid piece though.

kein, nice piece man, felt it flowed and stayed on topic very well.....different perspective on the topic, but you made it work....and thats the most important thing....i believe anyways....creativity with self-expression, yet effectiveness in writing....well done, good battle here.....but i think kein edged it out

v/kein witz

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