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Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy
Indeph Verse
g'luck fam
Damn homie you got respect,you a veteran, WAIT...
that fake quote,would probably work better when named.
^ Hmm wasn't feelin this as an opener a bit -_- IMO
that sig states a quote,that coulda brought up your hope...
yeah you could prove me wrong.....if I thought you were dope.
^ again kinda basic diss punch not ooo material fam
and there's a lie in the box you supposed to be reppin in...
nigga everyone got skills,on your level of excellence.
^ lol nice rhyme punch good in this bar nice diss
westside till you die,then after this you are midwest...
no more game no more dre,go and listen to dipset.
^ wack...no diss punch non existent
Go read a Book, "OF" shouldn't be O-V?...
shit,with you O.G's could of meant Oh Geez.
^ nice closer on the OV personal flipped quite good
Overall
Verse lacked dawg...2 out of 5 bars were good the rest was filler flow and structure were good it was the punches and personals that lacked under average verse IMO
KhAoZ ThEoRy Verse
Yo!..
Talkin bout ''strap up''?...Rockin a titty cup, Da heat in ur ''Bra''*
''Punch''? ugh, U dont even have da experience 2 serve at a Bar!
^ good opener punch ok diss = there
battlin u aint gettin very far, Lyke a Vietnemese on da Frontline
0-0? juz goes 2 show Ya skillz ''premature'' & this aint ur time!
^ diss there 1st line a bit meh 2nd line an hmm punch
we go Rhyme 4 Rhyme? so lame dude asked me 2 ''Swap Verses''
he got worried, no propps & it it took him dayz 2 Rehearse-His
^ -_- not feelin it i seen a lot of "took days to" bars
First Skriptz, Now U?..........Thanks dude, 4 siggin my ''Sonz''
ur juz ''weak-fun''...claimin ''its so hard'' 2 pull off a ''BIG PUN''
^ diss there Big Pun name was aight coulda been better though
if u own a Gun, stick ya ''trigger finger'' where it Belongs
..then rite b4 u ''pull''..go 'head & listen 2 Nirvana songs
^ diss -_- punch aight but not feelin it majorly
I'm not wrong, suicidez ya best Option, lyke Gothic Kids
only ''time'' u see'n ''action'' iz watchin old redman Vids
^ punch there but not ooooo but diss ok
Verses r hated, handstanin lookin at ''mom'' iz ur only ''wow''
shit ur shamin a legend...change da pic, cuz even he hates u now
^ ok closer diss str8 basic rhyme
Overall
Again not a great verse you threw more bars into it few more punches more time it looked like you put into this i think you got the win due to more on point punches & personals...but ima comment your vocab is's on some MaRVJay1009 shit lol...drop it if you writing for audio like that then fair nuff but in text you gotta be more understandable coz not everyone writes how you write words like "lyke" & "propps" it would be jus as easy to type "like" & "props" ya feel me...
V/KhAoZ ThEoRy...but overall under average verses from both
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i'm still tryin to figure out how bein born in another country makes somebody fake.
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