Pen 'N Paper- Your vocabulary was on point. The structure was tidy, but that doesn't really matter. I didn't like the small font, but I suppose it was necessary for the three part div align thing. You had imagery, telling a story well but being a bit vague, not coming out all at once. The length was good enough to not make it short or too long to be effective.

MC Iggy- I liked what you did with your ending. You had very basic vocabulary and everything was very straight forward. No mysteries for the reader. I didn't like the simplicity of your ending words, nothing with really anything more then two syllables at the most and that was with the use of the suffix -ing. Passerby was three, though. Basically, the vocab was okay. The whole story was very obvious, exactly what people would think when they first saw the topic.

I'm going to have to give it to Pen 'N Paper.