Ok, this was structured good and had good flow, multis and vocab. I felt like you pulled a title out of your ass and tried to write about though, and then you started to, putting ("they") all over the place... But then you realized that was too hard and got bored with it and just took it from there lol. Overall I thought this would have been better if you just took your time with it or got rid of the "they" idea and just preached your pure thoughts rather than trying to make it into a song-like drop. I thought there was some good emotion, and imagery could have been improved by just speaking your mind. Keep it up.

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...266#post2273266

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