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Stanza: I'm digging the concept you used here, it was quite creative even though it's not a topic you can do a million things with. The story developed nicely, you expressed strong and pure emotion, imagery was there too. Vocab might have been a bit upped but it gave the piece a sort of serene vibe. Flow was good, had short lines and that improved ya flow. Maybe a little more details here and there wouldn't have hurt you, expanded it a little maybe but overall this was a very solid piece!
Illumatic: quite original approach of the topic, had an interesting story line which kept the readers focussed throughout the whole thing. Might have expanded it a little too but you gave enough details though. The imagery was excellent and you combined it with raw emotion, I could see it as a movie in front of my eyes. Vocab might be bit more complex in places but overall it was good, flow was aight, had some multis too.
Vote goes to Illumatic
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