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Old 07-10-05, 11:41 AM   #9
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Emotion:

I feel that is a tie right here because both had a nice amount of emotion in their piece, both have a diffent style of emotion though, different way of expressing it which is good...

Topic Use:

I was feeling Sok's a bit more, I love how he viewed the topic and worked it out but Lyriclesolja had a nice approach as well so this was a close one

Imagery:

A tie again...

Sok's was good because you expressed emotion and immediately gave a clear image of it for instance:

What world would that be?
Just sitting thinking of philosophy,
Depression - Obsession - Emotion
Sunny beach days staring at the ocean,

Lyriclesolja painted a nice picture too but maybe not as consistent -, I felt it was more a emotional piece you wrote than an imagery one.

Vocabulary:

Lyriclesolja gets this one, he had more complexity but that doesn't always break a piece. Sometimes I enjoy basic vocab because it expresses a serene vibe.

The Good Lines:

Sok:

Written words with all they can give,
Art and Literature is all that we live,

Lyriclesolja:

all is lost when the fat lady sings her last tune,
one long sustaining note untill i meet my doom

My vote goes to ~sokaris~ but it was extremly close! Excellent drop by both!
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