Voted For: Mike McGuire

gotta give dis battle to MM....

basically because he actually rhymed...both verses were weak..
chaos-you have to fix your structure up and actually have some sort of rhyming...your punches werent that strong either

mike mcguire-you have to be more creative with your punches..transition your lines better also...you should also try to have all your lines be the same length but that isnt a big thing just makes it easier to read and make the structure look better

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