Thats a weird story man.. It also edges on Immortal techniques - You never know with the note she left behind after dying n shit.

Also I think you should definatly do something better than "i went down to the chemist and this hot bitch started commin onto me"... You should make it you went to a club or something. You gotta be a damn porn star to walk into a chemist and have the bitch just wanna fuck you then and there.

And further more, what kind of best friend would do a test to see if he friends bf was loyal, just to have her friend kill herself cause of it.

I think you needa go back to the drawing board for a bit.

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RIP jono, peace out bboy.
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