Voted For: Gangrene

Fuck Predator, he weak, he can't see me,
So I'ma beat'em, 5-0 clean, just like K- Trini/
^^Lmao....love this line.......
U mad I said that ?, well, Trini merked u hater,
Pred u garbage and ya Wins-low like Urkel's neighbors/
^^Decent wordplay.......
I just don't know why u think u betta for,
If I set his throat on fire,he still won't spit a hot metaphor/
^^^nah.....played

Well........I can't really give ya mad props from that 1st bar.That would be hatered and biased.Gotta vote honestly.That 2nd line shoulda been used as a set-up or sumtin.The 2nd punch was a nice wordplay.The 3rd bar was played.

Gangrene is garbage, and his flow retarded/
he a snitch we all know who the narcs is/
^^^Nope.....this mad weak son
U can read all my posts if u want/
I'm the best on RV in months/
^^self glorified.....not a punch
So after this battle, call me sire/
cause after this battle I'll be so great I just might retire/
^^self glorified.....

Predator......you got an ego.U think you crushed this guy and you also thought you beat me.Face it....you at the bottom of the barell and you need to improve...So..take this advice....

1st-Fix ya structure up...dun end lines with"/".Nobody does that anymore.Try to keep all lines the same lenght.
2nd.-Do not self glorify.Work on dissin the other guy and that only.Save that glorifing shit for Open Mic.Do not just state shit.Be indirect.It's all about metas and wordplay.Look at Gangrel's wins-low line for example.Shit like that ya gotta get.

Keep ya head up and keep elevatin.

Vote-Gangrel
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