I think you gotta pick a different type of beat. It's a higher pitched beat and your high pitched voice makes it clash. Also, your voice sounds a little too processed. If you only dub the words that rhyme at the end of your lines it would sound a little better. Nevermind......I think that was a chorus at the beginning.....am I right? If it si, you need to use two different pitches and make one volume lower than the other so they complement each other. Also, try to add some more inflection in your voice so you don't sound as monotone.

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