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Emotion:
Both had some really good emotions..sok your just lacked alittle bit..it was still good but to Me Ls had better emotions...he just more creativie words and feeling to create a more emotional peice
Imagery:
iight well this was a hard one but ima have to give this one to ls aswell to me sok you really went painted a picture in my mind ..about what was going on in your drop.. Ls used very detailed n creative words which made the reader image what was happening
Vocabulary:
I have to say this topic was a draw dont hate on me 
Structure:
both had good structure but sokaris ..had better structure cus he centered it..
The Good Lines:
heartless siege's of repressed pain,
pushed back but not built to contain
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all is lost when the fat lady sings her last tune,
one long sustaining note untill i meet my doom
Written words with all they can give,
Art and Literature is all that we live
my vote goes to LS..
keep it up nice drop both
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