Voted For: Nostradamus
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Nice verse ok structure flow was good nice and easy to read however the paragraph breaking down was ok but in topicals i'd only do that to be honest if you were going to chapter it because that can enhance topic which you didn't do...topic was on point enough though...basic rhyming not many multies...one or 2 weak ones maybe but an ok topical verse on the whole i just think you need a lil more work on them...but it was good jus my advice...work on the structure if you use chapters if you are going to break verses down they look better...also work on rhyming...it's perhaps 1/3 of the verse...use it to your advantage some ok metas though and lines in particular were
Into This Place That Is Roughly, Rugged And Beyond Repair
The Place Where The Thoughts Never Really Go to Share
Thats The Thoughts Of Murder, Envying, Drunkeness, And Emulations
Saving Up My thoughts In Sections Like I Hade a Church Congregation
^ were good
Nostradamus
Structure in the beginning a lil short but ok...got into rhythm after 1st 2 bars nicely kept on topic some slant rhyming and also multies...indonesia bar
your flow & structure are on the same level but the level of topic you bought and the angle you approached was a lot stronger and rhyming was nicely done...some cool metas fav bars are...
In-tangeble manuscripts, accurate plans thats immaculate.
Lost in a ditch effort to save humanity. by some fagget activist.
Its breaking my heart, like a seizure weed in indonesia.
Belief & reason, but I understand why people beefing.
Basically all in all Nos won this...ok battle though...keep at it you both
V/Nos...RTF in my Doomsday battle when open (Drops due on Sunday)