Voted For: 4fil

yo cuz,leave da block,you a pest in da streets/
killin' you wit dis will be part of 4 fillin my destiny/
^^That nice to know ya wanna kill him & all....but where da punch?
yo you ain't a sindicator of crime/
how can you be in da streets plottin' when you can't write a decent rhyme/
^^^basic and stretched out
look homie im more of a killer dan you need an example/
check out how im makin you commit suicide wit dis one rhyme,and dis ain't even da preamble/
^^^stretched out and whack
ya life ya gamble,when ya tuoch mics wit me/
cuz what da fight seems to be,will be over within a mintue,better believe me/
^^just stop.........

Lmao...this verse was horrible.I mean....for starters.U didn't have any punches or flow.U ain't got either one....you lost.Learn not to stretch your lines.Make them even.Get some wordplay and metas.And stop glorifing yourself....just diss the other guy man.Plus get rid a that newb structure.

The boys running and hiding.......... as if Will-a-peer just kissed him
With a Record of 1-0........... the only person he beat was the system
^^OK......but not really all that hot
Fucked up ugly, slimey and beat.......... Yeah i'm talking bout your head
I'll make this pussie bloddy........... and i'm winning this battle period
^^^1st line was good...but period lines are played.Didn't rhyem though
The only time your dope......... is when you put those drugs into effect
It's in his name to bite........... and the coward went and stole my accept
^^^Set up nice....but punch lacked
It must have been cold when you got frostbite.. and actually quite scary
seeing this ugly fruit around believing somebody's gonna pop his cherry
^^^OK...........

U raped the other guy in bassically every catergory.Verse wasn't a masterpeice.....but still way better than other guy's one.Every bar had some sort of wordplay.....which is really good.Next time try to add up a few personals.Get some decent concepts as well.Like that period shit....played.Got good stucture....but make every bar rhyme next time.

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