Excellent piece, ripped topic from league huh? I'ma spank you for that!

Very nicely written, excellent imagery, I could picture everything like a movie flashing in front of my eyes. Emotion was strong, pure and raw. I love how you divided it into different parts, kept the readers focussed and gave different views on situation. Concept was very interesting, you managed to really draw the readers into the story and keep them in it till the very end.

Nice...

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