hopesfall-ok it was good but kinda short and not sructurized either had some imagery and some vocab and thats good really need to work on the structure part as well......and kinda a creative part with that end of a quote there but that kinda felt more like poetry u kno but ur doin good u kno just keep practivin and ull elevate.....
Tweety- now this was good nice structure and flow to it good vocab and lines and emotion and imagery very good piece really like this piece cuz just tha fact u came good wit emotion here as well as the imagery very good.......
v/ tweety.....good cuz just brung more emotion and imagery to the piece and had a better vocab and structure and was just a lil better........but good job to the both of u and keep it up aight.......

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