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Old 07-16-05, 01:55 PM   #13
Willa
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
 
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ur flow was better but its still pretty basic work on it
work on ur metaphores
personals too
try out for cs
c hood work on ur structure u have alot of filler in some of ur lines ur metaphoresw are probably some of the worst ive seen u have no good personals and u p ur vocab
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