Thread: Point of Life
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Old 07-16-05, 09:33 PM   #12
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Flow was off at some points.....Decenbt rhyme sheme.Some suked like this one..

"Then Use innocence as a clutch cuz in one instance u rushed
With possibilities in n’ open world right afta u finished ya lunch"
^^^1st line was ight....but secong suked.Seemed as though you made that 2nd line just to rhyme.

Work on your metas a bit too.

Overall....A good peice....I'd give it a 7.5/10
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