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Voted For: BLACK~MAGIK
Ok, black gets this in my opinion its not that yours was bad optik, just it seems yours was too simple wheras blakcs was more complex, it had a better flow decent vocab and imagery was there in both. Optiks had the better emotion and that was the key thing in his.
Just need to work on your structure and vocab.
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