this was a very good open mic..

1st verse.. very good verse.. like very good verse.. why i say that? lol reminds me of how i use to write when i did open mics and topicals consistantly.. dont believe me look at my topicals or seach for open mics made by me here lol.. but yeah very good.. really liked not just the great multi's.. but also having some good n creative lines.. much props..

okay 2nd verse.
okay.. now your verse was very good... but only problem was your structure man.. it really makes it like less interesting to read when you make the lines that long.. its like way to long.. n is longer than it looks cuz u made the words smaller.. but other than that.. good verse.. vocab could be used.... n a l more creativitie.. but most of all work on structure n flow.. but u prob usually have good flow n shyt but in this one u didnt..

8/10

rtf in sig..

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