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Old 07-20-05, 11:57 PM   #4
Willa
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
 
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Yo check it . .
alrite lost the check it its wack its not an audio
Battling me is like a "orthodontist" visit, so boy "brace" urself
cat i spit hot fire get ready to be melt/
was that an attempt at a metaphore if so work on it 5/10
Even if this dog got a masters at "art" of "freestyling" @ Harvard University/
he wouldn't be know as a "Philosopher/ MC"/
yea it was a personal but it was wack and played 4/10
"Clean" ur lines up if you wanna go far/
If you looking for good "soap" you've got to raise the "bar"/
corny meta lousy punch really played 3/10
I bet when they read ur verse its gonna be like thirsty jokers saying wheres the pucnch line/
cat give up u can't ryme/
cat i fucked u up and gave you a "limped" and don't try to pull out a "lame" excuse/
well i dot no if u thought that allrhymed or what but it was wack no punch at all 4/10
work on ur flow metaphores and personals ur structure was non existant it wasnt there u need mad elevatin
Battle me u got nothing to lose so imma leave u flowless
You use your name as motivation to make sure that u stay focused
not that great of an opener or personal but it was better than any of his lines 6/10
How do I know this……… ima philosopher I know lots in this joint
Like I know u looking forward to a loss now that’s the wrong focal point
that line was wack really played 6/10
Its like beauty cause this battle is in the eye of the beholder
It gets colder…… u cant win this battle if u was a solider
played line again 5/10
You like r.kelly telling all chapters of how u was trapped in the closet
Until u came out and donated to your boyfriends semen deposit
played and not that good really 7/10 but it was kinda funnylol
I flow like a fossit……cause im moving on a continuous basis
So find new places…… when this battle over you’ll need an oasis*
umm at least u had some vocab i guess 7/10
You came with the big dogs so know its time to play
You wont stay…… even your focus is running away
corny ass linne this reminded me of his verse 5/10
You couldn’t handle this battle if I told u to hold this
You looking at the king of rapverse so no wonder u wanna stay focused
wack ass closer stop glorifyin urself in a battle take it to om 4/10
ok u need to put in some more personals cause u were really lackin there
work on being creative u didnt have one line that was creative
ur metaphores werent there being witty will help u alot
but im giving this to u because u had better flow better vocab bettter punches and ur structure blew his away
alot of elevatin needs to happen here peace
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