ok i saw ya pic and was like dammnnn this kid look like some fat ass white kid that got a mic for christmas. ...enough said

listening to live on stage...

flow/rhyme scheme-ok ya flow is smooth, but it needs work, cause its on and off, sometimes you speed up or slow down to land ya rhymes on the snare....you also land ya shit late and early you need to time ya shit and land it better....rhyme scheme is aight, needs work to make ya flow better....

delivery/riding the beat- ok personally i think ya voice is sick lol i dont know why but i love it. thats what makes ya delivery good ....like when you first come in im like damn, soo ya delivery is nice..riding the beat is kinda on the fence....cause sometimes you do it good other times blahhhh jus landing rhymes on the snare..

pronounciation/breathe control,- ya prounciation is good, i can clearly understand...some words you need to announciate better but overall good announciation...breathe control was pretty good considering you were straight flowin never really took small punches...did you punch in at all? or did you edit out ya breaths because i cant really hear any noticable breathing...


lyrics/style-ok this is where you are lackin ....lyrics and style...you need to get more original stlye and lyrics....your a fat white kid, not a big black man in harlem....drop the 50 cent lyrics, you dont stab peoplem, you dont have gangstas ect. and by ya lyrics ya style is comin off like you tryin to be a thug, but your not....find a unique style do you...

what to work on-LYRICS LYRICS LYRICS...flow polish it up.....ya chrous isnt bad just add some dubs or double ya vocal layers so we can tell its a chorus....and finally quality in the begining i could hear the HISSSS like whoa...work on ya production a bit....

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