Topic Was really feeling this topic fam...nice different to the norm..aptly titled
Content
Im not really sure yo..ima re-read a couple of timez n alter this l8r...it seems like its pretty simple in what its about and conveying..i duno...ill see
Structure
Real nice, liked it...you got a unique style thats real accessible...this piece flowed fluidly from start to finish, the lines were concise and precise and straight to the point no over complification
Imagery
Born of grizzly pate
Through the dungeons and purgatory
Fights dared in hate
We are the prophets of heart
Emotions abound
Those are the sounds
Of the hope filled abound.

^those lines stood out to me...imagery is real vivid and i re read that bit liek 3 times
Emotion
Pours out...a lot of emotion in this...:
I see, feel, hear, taste
And smell by it.
Perceive the world with my pen
^ you used punctuation perfectly in these lines...made the shit emotional and emphatic....dopeness
Devices (metaphors/similies etc)
meh...not many..but when u did, u came wid nice original shizzle yo:
Stand in the fellowship of men
And fair angels in bloom
Angles of whom create
Infinite space in a room
^DAMN
Problems
shit felt like too much of a song...but meh..thats a personal response...you kept a nice tight structure and let it slip at the end...should have kept the form constant
Improve
Chanign up styles, rhymeschemes, more devices

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