sok
not bad stucture is good but you use basic rhymes and you tried to use a different style of poetry i forget what its called but you didnt do it properly the emotion needs work, flow is alright but you need to work on emotion thats important for poetry, the imageyr wasn't to bad but nothing much goin on in ya story, work on that.

Lyrical
better stucture wasn't as good but you have a nice flow, good vocabulary very witty lines some creativty missed in there, some nice metas very good emotion, but what was most shown was imagery nice story good shot man keep it up.

vote/ LyricalSolja

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