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Old 07-23-05, 02:15 AM   #24
Willa
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
 
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Laughter is the best medicine so ur rhymes are a cure
Bitch keeps posting bull shit like we asking for more
flow was off line was played horrible opener no personal 6/10
This is like a game of hungry hungry hippos
The winner is the one with the most “marbles”
didnt really rhyme it was creative but it was corny 6/10
So dumbass go away . . . you passé
Couldn't pour piss out of a boot if the instructions were on the heel . . . And now u’ve lost so just deal
yea not gettin it but flow was horrid no personal again 4/10
And remember I’m the hero bitch . . .and if you lucky I’ll flip u and put u to the left of me like my side kick (get it)
corny no personal and ur structure was messed
ok work on ur structure some of ur lines were short and others were stretched
ur flow was one of the worst ive seen on rv
u need to stop using pre writtens and use some personals
also work on metas and ur vocab way tooo basic
overall u need to improve on everything personally

Act Stupid I'll Deal Wit You....Ya Friends Dont Even Want A Deal Wit You
Mills? U Deal Nickels....Dis "Dicks Green"....Finish Jerkin Ya "Dil Pickle"!! umm good creativity i guess but i didint reall feel it 7/10
You Still Livin A Cunts Life...."Bone" Husbands Den Literally "Dog" Wives
This Dogs Trife....He Paid His Cock 2 Quit Drugs....Cuz It Foamed White!! (get it?)lol this was funny 8/10
Everyone Knows U Sideways....But "Rainbow Brain".....I Dont Mind Gays
So Continue WACKIN YASELF EVERY WEEK...Like Abusive Bod-Days!! ive seen this line b4
U Dont Deserve A Verse, Must Be 50 Cent...Cuz All Ya Flows Get Worse
Last Time U Cursed...Ya Mom Beat Ya Pants So Hard It Became A Skirt!! bad closer
u had no personals so work on it
however ur wordplay and creativity outweighed his so good battle
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