Tha was like reading a novel,SHIT!

It was alotta over stretched lines,but at tha same time it felt like poetry...I read it twice ta catch it,but at the end it was nice..ur wordplay was nice,multi's coo...

my fav line's are

*Taking quiet deep breaths, carefully putting my finger on the weapon trigger
Sighting him getting ready to kiss her. *Boom* she falls without a whimper

*With an un-easy feeling, I slid off the ring from her cold lifeless, motionless pinky
Watched it road the waves, like my heart and myself, I watched it sinking

^^those where detail'd^^


8.1/10

structure was outta place a lil...Still nice.

sorta wierd at times tho.

return favor,thanx