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aight i'll go 10 lines.....

....and as I am one for bringing originality.....check this out,

KEY
BOLD = "me speaking"
ITALIC = "veyetal speaking"

“Veyetal I peeped ya verses man, and damn they wack G”
“I know, so to make them seem less shit I just say, errmm…quick key”
-Good Opener w/ a personal

“I wanna know ya location so I can personally hand you your defeat
But ya profile says ya from ‘out n’ about’”………………………..........
………………………….….”well it was either that or ‘born on the street’”
-Meh Didnt feel this as a good punch w/ a personal

“3-0 in KLL, you on a roll but I have a feeling ya wheels about to pop”
“well, you can consider me re-tyred like cars at the auto-shop” (RETIRED)
-Ah I liked the wordplay good punch w/ it too

“see why I don’t battle ya, I mean I merked you in this conversation”
“its cool kid……I mean my shit’s so overwhelming its giving me constipation”
-Ok Punch w/ a wordplay

“but yo, this is a battle for a title, so to be fair cud you spit at least one bar”
“aight, yo avy be blowin up fuck all and its still hittin more than you are”
-Decent closer with a punch and a personal

Overall- This was actually a good diss verse, you had nice wordplays with some punches some of the bars i found Ok. Still this was overal a decent verse with some personals and wordplays put together to make a decent punch, keep it up.

changed his name again, but for the best, cause this king never knew fame
looks like you're all dried up solo....thats cause you never had a rain/reign
-Alright I like the opener you started off with a good punch w/ a personal

and it pains me to say this, but even being retired, he's still getting beaten up
and you think he'd slow down on the whackness....but 'nos' is speeding up
-Meh Didn't find this as a good punch..just average.

but cheer up man, still have your lyrics.....or have those already been killed
cause if you gotta suck the life outta others....then whats that say 'bout your skills
-It kinda you were saying hes a biter, Ok Punch.

slap you in the face bitch, get straight....ya need to learn to take beats
but solo just sits there looking confused.........and turns the other cheek
-Good Punch

had enough of this freak, always spittin shit, i just figured the guy was just dumb
until i saw king with his hand up his ass.......so its just his rule of thumb
-Decent Closer

Overall- Nice verse some bars I found ok punches, but it had good personals in it though. Word your Lines better next time to make it A decent Punches. Overall it was a nice verse keep dropping.

Conclusion- This was a hard decension, cause Both of ya'll Need to word your punches better. I felt Nos had better punches, and no it's not because I'm in his crew. Vet your punches was ok, but if it would've been worded it better then you'll had this battle like hands down no joke. Nos I felt the same about you too, but you had some worded lines and good Punches w/ decent wordplay so I vote Nos.

Chea.