this was smooth, being a spoken word poet myself i can relate to some of the stuff

you need a little more umph with your words tho, more imagery, better wording woudlint hurt nither

like really dig down deep and give your point of view and spill out the emotions

you did good with this peice, feels like a spur of the moment type thing, but i dug it and got the message you were giving

would like to hear this as an audio with no beat, just the words