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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

dis kid is a clown he think net rap is cool,should i slap dis fool?.
'pen n paper' wouldn't sale if he drop'd durin time 2 go 'back 2 school'
-I liked the Opener, Nice wordplay. Good Punch

fam u gota lil rep on dis site but dont be proud of it fag.
u record tracks? nah u like "dexter's sister" u not "allowed in da lab".
-Ha Nice Concept, Good Punch

i been back 4 nights...now u talkin like you nice.....where????
ya rap career like 'toy story' u wont have a 'buzz' 4 a few 'light years'.
-Lol Decent Concept Nice Punch

need protection in his own hood so he give detective's bread.
i aint badd with 'writin tools' but ima fill dis nigga 'pen with lead'.
-Good Punch

no hot bars from dis guy just weak...so fam all da lyin pleez stop!
cuzz you couldn't "make-classics"...."designin reeboks".
-Ok Closer

Overall= This was a decent verse you dropped. Nice Wordplays with good concepts, and nice punches w/ personals. Keep Dropping.

MaRVJay at first I was thinking u were good but that’s what I thought
Cuz ur verses are like Jaws Sequels u were biting but just not caught
-Hmmmm Ok Opener. Nice Concept.

Man RV is not for u, do I gotta tell u 1009 times to get it through ur skull?
I darken the name while for u to get attention ur whole verse should be bold
-Nah Not feeling this Punch. Good Concept, should've worded it better

Cuz they mad borin and u still askin why they callin u amerikas nightmare?
MJ ur verses are like Micheal Jackson no need to ask if they just might scare
-Word Better next time. But Ok Punch with a Ok concept.

Man just face it ur verses will never be hott unless u burn them wit matches
Ur punchlines are weak they like bad baseball players no one actually catches
-Ha Nice Punch. Good Concept.

So now that we kno the truth bout u ur reputation gon fall like rain precipitation
U aint winnin no more u aint lucky like winnin a raffle so thnx for ur participation
-Ok Closer.

Overall- Some of your punches were "Ok", It just needed to be worded better. The baseball Line was good. The concepts In your lines was Nice, but next time word your Lines better.

Conclusion- Alright this was an Nice battle. Both came good, But I'm going to have to vote for Marv. He had nice punches with good concepts and decent wordplay w/ Personals. Pen and Paper you punches was good, it just seem that your Lines could've been worded better. The concepts you had was nice, it just that you need to word your lines better. Sorry But marv got you with "Punches, Wordplays, Personals"..Chea.

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