Voted For: Tweety




Good battle by both...Tweet.....strong imagery...you vividly desecribed every facot...some imagery was somewhat forced tho....structure was good coulda been stronger.....vocab was ok....not as spectacualr as it SHOULDA been....flow was koo....the story developed nicely....woulda liked to ahve seen sum metas but eh good anyways overall

BM......man you opened nicely then started falling off...you didn't let the story develop the way it coulda..if u ahd wrote more an kept wit the story better u coulda had it...ya vocab was koo..flow fair..structure wasn't too great neither...imagery faded in an out....u had it in spots...but there was alot of inconsistencies.....overall ya piece jus didn't have enough lines too fully develop an it cost you the match


Vote: Tweet

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