Voted For: Tweety

Tweety
nice verse the begiining started off slow but you started to work into the imagery alittle and put out a vision of what was happening,the emotion was nice i was feeling every inch of it,thhe vocabulary was decent in this as well.....nice read girl

BM
you had a great start to your topical,but then towards the end you started to fall off a bit i mean it wasnt a solid piece,your imagery was decent as the same was your emotion,if you never fell of at the end id say the outcome of this battle might of been a different story....anyways keep working at it

v/tweety

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