[Verse1:Opt1k]
there's times in life you can see the end.
a loaded guncocked back which u cant defend.......

Opt1k your verse was simple but o.k.....you need to up your vocab and improve your structure.....try to make each line near enough the same length...your verse didn't lack in enotion tho and i felt this was your strongest point....therefore expand on this and include more in your verse

[Verse2:Spoken Word]
Ive been rapping since rap was just something to do
But now im getting dope, spitting something at you

spoken word....a good verse from you...nice flow...some funny lines....here and there and you also had metaphors as well....good verse..keep it up

[Verse3:Artik Phrost]
…This Marks The End Of Ya Simple Ways And A Start Of A New Era
New Swear Of Heads Keying Punches Two By Two Like Noah Paired Um!!..

Artik phrost....really like your style...this is the second piece of writing i've read from you and i think your real good....too many good lines to mention and metaphors were real nice....punches were hot also....get at me bout a collab sometime

Verse4:Tony Green]
(Who the fuck is that) Its Tony Green mothafucker.
(Dressed in all black) I'm on the scene mothafucker.

T.......an o.k verse but i've seen better from you....i think you used too much repitition....your flow was off at some points also...anyway all in all a nice piece and ya'll styles of writing worked well together....i look forward to more from all of you........

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